Tuesday, November 3, 2009

Treatment - 55 Fiction


Note:- 55 Fiction infers to fictional writings bounded to a maximum of fifty-five words.



Treatment  




" How are you feeling now? "
 

" Still high Temperature and difficulty in breathing ... "


" What did doctor say? "
 

 " He said that it is a kind of  virus ......"


" Did he give any medicine? "


" No. It has got no medicine it seems "


 " Is it  Swine Flu? "


" No .....  it is called 'human beings' "


" Hmmm ....... do take care Earth ... "


" Thanks Mars ... "



26 comments:

Rachana Shakyawar said...

@ Mahesh

Wow…this one is great…ummm…till end I kept guessing what is it…and who is sick and so on.
..For the moment I felt you again had some conversation with some of your friend like your previous post ;) …anyway its nice to read tini-mini fictions reflecting the deep issues in the most appropriate and easy way to understand.

Personally, I have a special fondness for the topics related to environment and this
one just hits the bull’s eye with all the heat, greenhouse, ozone, population, pollution and sick bald earth without trees concern.

I heartily appreciate your deed and fiction:)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Rachana,

You are one of the few readers/friends who tries to understand my intention behind a topic.

Yes, i did mean it when i said humans as virus(including me...). My concern was towards the extinction of many species on earth mainly due to human deeds and needs.

Thanks again for your heartfelt appreciation :)

cheers,
mahesh

sudheer spicy said...

haa..
really nice one
i thought it was a joke
finally irealised its a fact

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Sudheer

Welcome to wisdomism....
Thanks for your time and the response :)

pavan said...

THANKS...,

IT IS REALLY A FACT...

vineet said...

nice wrk dear n i truly agree with it..rock on

Singh Amit said...

Very Nice 55-fiction.. :)
Interesting and thoughtful...

Cheers!!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ PAwan
@ Vineeth
@ Amit

Thanks a lot guys.. :)

cheers,
mahesh

Shruti said...

Mahi,
really a good one! I read two times to understand this! But this is very good.. Better than all other fictions you wrote! Seems you took upon the points I told about 55fiction.. that suspense factor came out really well! Good selection of words! Your intention of conveying a message through every post/fiction is truly stupendous!
And I loved the picture which you added here :)

Good work mahi!
Keep exploring new arenas in writing!
Cheers,
Shruti

Nethra said...

It was very nice. Anyways earth is gonna die on December 21st 2012. It can't live sick forever and there are no chances of recovery.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Netra,

Thanks buddy :)
Do you really buy the concept of 2012 tragedy end?? Are you serious?

Raghav said...

Wanted to share few Dialogues from the Movie -The Matrix


AGENT SMITH:
"I'd like to share a revelation that I've had during my time here. It came to me when I tried to classify your species. I've realized that you are not actually mammals. The life signs continue their chaotic patterns.
Every mammal on this planet instinctively develops a natural equilibrium with the surrounding environment. But you humans do not. You move to an area and you multiply and multiply until every natural resource is consumed and the only way you can survive is to spread to another area.
There is another organism on this planet that follows the same pattern. Do you know what it is?
A virus.
Human beings are a disease, a cancer of this planet. You are a plague.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Shruti,

Am smiling coz u liked it....

"" Your intention of conveying a message through every post/fiction is truly stupendous!........""

Thanks a lotttttt for those supportive words , specially the word 'Intention'.

Thanks to google images for that apt pic i found.

cheers,
mahi

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Raghav ,

am clapping for yuu buddy...

Wowieeeeeee.

Thats an apt/perfect response with clarification and justification at their best. Your response did complement the topic. What else a writer can ask for?

thanks , thanks thanks a million ton for bringing those clinching wise dialogues.
Thanks again :)

cheers,
mahesh gaadu

Shruti said...

Mahi yaar!
So many people like the work you do! Am just one of them who admire your work.. I wish that you get success in the work tou intend to do :)

Keep Smiling,
Shruti

BK Chowla said...

Excellent 55.Only if all became concious of cleaner environment.
Save earth.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Chowla ji....

You are absolutely correct. I strongly feel that we can do more than just writing to save earth(or save humans?)

I am planning to start a green thread on this . Would like to hear more suggestions from you.
Thanks :)

√♪נ汉Ψ said...

hey I have became a fan of your 55Fictions..........

Keep writing them.......


:)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Vijay,

Thanks for your spiced words....
Yeah, i do try to live up to your expectations .....

cheers,
mahesh

Roshmi Sinha said...

Good one! In line with the need of the hour... "Save Earth"...

Nethra said...

First of all, my name is not Netra, its Nethra and 2012 concept is nothing about whether I believe it or not. Earth is really unwell like you have told in your story and its not gonna survive longer. We can do nothing about it. We might plant one or two plants but everywhere around the world people wont stop deforestation and other things they do in the name of globalization. People lack humanity. Anyways, this was only my perception and I know you might think otherwise.

YOGI.....the ultimate said...

hey hai its a good one as one of u friend said its a fact......

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Nethra,

Sorry, sorry, sorry both for the name and the stupid question. I was always in doubtful that one day i will end up misspelling your name. I have a friend with same name but diff spelling, Netra.
Whenever I start replying your comments, i use to verify it. Somehow this time i missed the track. I know how it feels when you read your name with a missing alphabet.
I will assure you that I will try my best to avoid such inconveniences. I am not sure whether this explanation is suffice to calm you down, if not make you smiling Nethra :( :( :( :(

Coming to the stupid question, i asked it casually hoping that you will be giving some interesting theories of Nostradamus. That is it.
Anyways, i agree with your explanation.

Sorry again.
Now,can u smile a cm plz?

anxiously ,
maheysh

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Yogi,

Hey, after a long time...
Thanks anyways. :)

Shilpa Garg said...

Wow!! Amazingly different 55 Fiction!! Loved it!! :)
So very apt, relevant!!

Keep expressing!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Shilpa Garg,

Am glad that you loved it.
Thanks a bunch for your support and the response :):)

cheers,
mahesh