Saturday, August 7, 2010

Goodbye

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 13; the thirteenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.




Like a much delayed train entering 
an eagerly awaiting brightly lit railway station's platform,
Change should come in us with enthusiasm ,

but this time too, the platform is dark,
the bogies are filled, without hesitation, with
writers of old worlds on papers
politicians of old words in bags 
and bureaucrats of old ideas in brains

The common people are standing 
on the other sides of the tracks 
without tickets in empty hands 
but with plenty of agony on their foreheads 

This dirty system needs dry cleaning,
but someone has raised petrol prices 
Multiplication of minus and plus,
searching for a circle with 4 sides
and we call it development

The vested interests of self-serving elite is dubbed as ‘national'
I wanted to say Goodbye to my nation's Vision,
But someone has removed tomorrow morning's tracks
All the status messages immediately displayed "Train got delayed"

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Who are you?
with bended waists and twisted tears
with ruffled hair and semi draped sarees
roaming and searching around these graves

Who are they?
In the graves and from where are they ?
In which battle did they die?
Which battalion and which number ?

Ask Krishna, if it is Kurukshetra,
Ask Mughals, if it is Panipat
Ask Uncle Sam, if it is Iraq
Crimean war, Korea war
First and Second world wars
Ask Bismark, ask Hitler
Ask Brahma, the creator.

Sigh !!! Please!!!
Dont look at me in that manner
with dried eyes and clenched teeth
Dont show me desert breasts 
which are void of tears
What can i answer you,
Whom can i say is responsible for ?

Its time for dark night...
Time for Tigers to  hunt their prey
Time for tender widows to jump into a damn well
Time for dogs to fight over bones of dead history

Some fear, yes, fear
around with foam of poison 
dead poison, deathly poison
agony poison, sad poison
it is flowing, gushing and overflowing 

O Mothers!!! Please go !
Why are you roaming around these graves
by bending and bending
with drabness and drabness
Dead bodies don't speak
Graves show you nothing
Death never recognizes
There is no mercy for nature, in nature
All power hearts pump blood, for blood

Suppressing your pain in yourselves 
Pricking your own eyes
Why to roam , in this way
in this way, among these blunt trees
these ant hills and collapsed houses

Go away! Go away !
Goodbye!
Go away !

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Note:- 77 Fiction infers to fictional writings bounded to a maximum of 77 words.


She took an auto from the red light area to the beach....
It was her day of 'freedom'...
She wanted to taste the moments of 'her' being a 'person'...
She was desperate to lose her 'identity' of being a sexual object...
She felt the ecstasy of being in a cage-less world ...
She wanted to explore the heights of her new life ...
That day was her birthday...
So, she bid Goodbye to her old life , only until tomorrow...




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20 comments:

Anonymous Someone said...

The second one was quite heart pumping. As if a challenge, to say good bye, to arrive, to awake from the stupor. Beautiful.

The last one was again, different, like old times.

All in all,
beautiful.

Cheers
Blasphemous Aesthete

Rachana Shakyawar said...

@ Mahesh

I love the concept in whole!
Perhaps was waitiong for such soul stirring post!

You gave a completely new colors in new words and a feeling behind the annoying situations to the agony of our daily routine life!!

I love the paras where you will find the words mentioned below:
+ Morning tracks
+ Brahma
+ Roaming around graves
+ Ant Hills

And among the above all words I was amazed to see how you wrote about the pain in roaming around the graves...where the whole earth is porous and filled with wires and human pain!

Twists and turns of Ant hills and whole new prospect behind the words clearly said a loud story!
I liked the way you have played so creatively-intelligently-passionately with words yet not dilluting the message behind each and every line and perhaps each word and Question Mark!!

Simple loved it.
Plus the Historical reference and combining in tacts to teach...is awesome! It makes it feel so connected. In a way you have touched so many different aspects...social, economical, mechanical, climate, fauna and human touch after all!!

So so touched!
SO much adorable..very admiring!
This is sure one of my TOP fav. post of your collection in this blog!


~ Keep the Spark ALive..

Chetan said...

how simply you express in the right way..
i just love that...

Shruti said...

you manage to give something everytime right?! A fresh template. After a long time.. Gud luck Mahi :)

Sidra Sayeed said...

i liked your hunger as a writer to communicate disjoint but relevant issues/stories/thoughts :)

Ritu said...

The second one was powerful but I love the immediacy of the third one. ATB

R. Ramesh said...

ooofff..real good one...gripping boss..just took a print to read it again..cheers

Worthless Rantings said...

Nicely done...
Very interesting caricaturization with words, to say the least...

Worthless Rantings said...

Nicely done...
Very interesting caricaturization with words, to say the least...

Vibhuti B said...

Hey Mahesh,
Its been ages since I visited here and am sorry for that..:(
This post was so full of wisdomism.
I like the way you always choose to express your thoughts and views in a radically different style.
I liked the flow of prose in poetic style. And then that poetry with such hard-hitting words..
Amazing
keep it up.
ATB..:))

Jaspreet said...

I really liked your style of past.And the last one, is really positive!..much required freedom!

Beyond Horizon said...

a goodbye left wid feeling of agony...unanswered questions....truth which is nvr hidden but nvr allowed 2 reflect its power
a thoughtful post indeed!!!

Someone Is Special said...

Aww.. A unique way to express your thoughts, powerful words which shows your knowledge on them. Great post. deserves to be in the top three..

All The Best for BAT 13.

gmsaravana - Goodbye

Yours Frendly,
Someone Is Special

gkam said...

A very powerful monologue.
I liked it
ATB for BAT13
Gkam - Goodbye

Keerthi P said...

The first one was thought-provoking (even though, we have thought on that topic a million times since Independence). Love the railway station called India. :)

The second one was rather disturbing. Efficient usage of historical events. Love the line - there is no mercy for nature, in nature
All power hearts pump blood, for blood.

The last one was my favourite. Soul-stirring. Enough said.

All the best!

Vee... said...

Clearly second one is the best!

Ask Krishna, if it is Kurukshetra,
Ask Mughals, if it is Panipat
Ask Uncle Sam, if it is Iraq
...
Ask Bismark, ask Hitler
Ask Brahma, the creator
...
Some fear, yes fear..

This one has got all the intensity!

~Vee...

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Shilpa Garg said...

Wish its Final Goodbye for all the 3 sores that you mentioned.
Loved the first and the last one. Wonderful work, Mahesh.
All the best for BAT-13!
Cheers :)

Nethra said...

That was pretty good. Especially the 77 fiction.
All the best for BAT! :)

Hiyaa said...

" Dead bodies don't speak
Graves show you nothing
Death never recognizes
There is no mercy for nature, in nature
All power hearts pump blood, for blood "

Brilliant. This post really took me by the heart and ripped into my soul!
All the best!