Tuesday, June 8, 2010

Playground - 77 Fiction.


Note:- 77 Fiction infers to fictional writings bounded to a maximum of 77 words.

Playground

Though he was 11 years old, he used to play cricket with boys much older to him.

That day, he was fielding at boundary line.

He dropped a catch in the previous over.
 
Then, he got one more chance to prove his catching skills.

He was running towards the ball in the air which was 20 meters away from him.

Before he could catch it, his hands caught something else.

It was a misfired rocket by the US military.

PS : In Afghanistan , the attacks on thousands of civilians and children has become quite common in the name of "misfired rockets".

16 comments:

vEnKy said...

Good one mahesh. I was really surprised they way in ended. I thought it was something concerning India.

Would Football be more apt. you can use " the misfired rocket hit him before it hit the back of the net"

Anonymous Someone said...

your stories have crisp turns that suddenly render them a very serious mood. Its the best part of fiction.
Great job.

Regards
Blasphemous Aesthete

Gyanban said...

Good post but a sad reality. wonder when this ordeal will end.

Shilpa said...

Short but hard hitting...!!

Beyond Horizon said...

“You cannot simultaneously prevent and prepare for war.”-ALBERT EINSTEIN

dese thoughtful words lost in dis era

evn if its reminded WUD D WAR EVER END???

good 1.....

Beyond Horizon said...
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Roshmi Sinha said...

Once the self-styled 'World's policeman-cum-superpower-cum-oil grabber...' colonizes a country... they will never leave...

... and woe betide anyone who dares to criticize them. Here are a couple of links... you may want to check out:

1. http://www.dawn.com/wps/wcm/connect/dawn-content-library/dawn/news/world/21-helen-thomas-ends-white-house-career-amid-uproar-sk-07


2. http://www.showbiz411.com/2010/06/07/helen-thomas-resigns-retires-white-house-press-corps

Mehak said...

this is tragic...nice writing though..

Ritu said...

What a twist! Sad but so true

BK Chowla, said...

Very interesting

Ramesh Sood said...

You have put it as fiction.. I am sure it is.. but well written piece with a scary end..

sushobhan roy said...

Awesome! Couldn't imagine such an ending to the story even in my dreams.. Hats off to u for binging out the plight of the children in Afghanistan thru this post..:)

Shilpa Garg said...

Oh!! That's so tragic!!
Shocking too! :(

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Venky..
I agree with you buddy ....Football could be a better choice too

My reasons for including cricket are.
1. My passion for cricket
2. Catch near a boundary
3. Recent cricket developments in Afghanistan

Anyway, thanks for your inouts and the feedback. Keep dropping by :)

@Anonymous Someone ...
Yes, you got it right. I prefer them in that way....may be because i like them to read in that way. Thanks for the pat and analysis buddy :)

@ Gyanban...
The ordeal ends when the capitalism ends.
Thanks for the pat buddy :)

@ Shipla..
It is the hardest hitting .Thanks Shilpa:)

@ Beyond Horizon...
Thanks for the response buddy.

@ Roshmi ...
I knew that you would respond with some supportive information and analysis and you did it.
Thanks for giving the best feedback and the much informative links :)

@ Mehak...
Thanks buddy :)

@ Ritu ji...
Yea, saddest ...

@ Chowla ji...
Thanks Sir...

@ Ramesh sood ji...
Thanks for the pat , Sir.

@ Sushobhan ...
Thanks a lot for the wonderful pat and the encouragement :) :)

@ Shilpa Garg...
Yea, rude shock ...

HaRy!! said...

dude...... aweseommmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmE!..... GIVN yu a bow :)

Kena said...

Another great post....Very interesting.