Wednesday, April 7, 2010

Appearance - 55 Fiction

Note:- 55 Fiction infers to fictional writings bounded to a maximum of fifty-five words.

 Appearance


They are at Taj Mahal...
She is ravishingly beautiful...
Her comely eyes are expressive, delightful and captivating... 
Her charming looks are gorgeous and entrancing  ... 
Her winsome smile is enchanting, enthralling and enticing ... 
Her excellent attire is gracious, fascinating and adorable...
He clicked her.
The photo is not as attractive as her.
She is in burqa.
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PS : Lemmi spill the beans(Intentions, not interpretations).  I have  clubbed 3 different versions into one  generic one.
The she here indicates 3 perspectives of the story.
1. A Girl
2. Taj Mahal
3. Mumtaz

Now, the shades and shadows of camera(photo), SHE and  HE are,


1. She : Any girl who is being restricted by the paternal society(He)  through the help of vested and twisted interpretations of Religions(Photo).

2. Taj Mahal : The Taj Mahal deserves beauty. In my view it is a beautiful burqa in which the more beautiful Mumtaj is being masked by ShahJahan(He) by the help of camera called 'Architecture'. World knows more about  Taj Mahal than the reason for the Taj, ie Mumtaj.

3. Mumtaj : She was being masked by her own beauty . Very few people know about the beautiful person in her. Here the HE is everyone of us and the camera is our prejudice and mindset.

I Thank Rachana for enabling me to reveal my intentions and leaving me with  writer's satiation. 


13 comments:

Madhulika said...

You seem to b d King of Microfiction...Awesome work...I also liked your blog layout...All yr pics tell that u r a deep thinker.

Gud luck for more ..

Madhulika.
www.madhulikasays.blogspot.com

HaRy!! said...

as usual GOOOD!cyu around !

Mehak said...

good read! :)

Roshmi Sinha said...

That was a nice twist in the tale :)

Lakshmi Rajan said...

If she is in Burqua how did he observed her excellent attire and winsome smile ?

- Lakshmi Rajan

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Lakshmi Rajan....

Thanks for raising the point of objectivity.

HE can be anything....her husband, boyfriend, photographer, dad....
Here, the concern is not who the HE is, rather, what she is and what she is being made into...

I wanted to draw the contrast between the major factors of a photo(normally, we do have the intention to know how our face appears in a pic) and certain social factors of a community.

As it is the matter of a religion's sentiments, i am restraining myself from giving the rational and valid reasons behind my writing. I guess you got my point...

Thanks again :)

Rachana Shakyawar said...

@ Mahesh

So enthralling experience!
You know when I was reading the post…thought...it was TajMahal…than wondered at the end like a dumb..how the TajMahal is in burkha!

Perhaps...later reading it second time I understood I was a half backed fool :P and you bowl over me this time completely! I simply loved the dash of beauty and the mysterious beauty swathe in fiction!WOW!!


~ So while I absorb and cache on this fiction’s riveted spirit and a monument a gift to the woman…I want you to firstly visit that place personally…it is true miracle to it pose!

~ And secondly I want you to see my past very old post…which were so raw and so much unfinished yet the best angles captured
Wah Taj!...

~Keep the Spark Alive..

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Madhulika....
Seems like a big sized hat for a climbing guy..... Anyway, Thanks for the appreciation .
Yea, after many disappointing templates, somehow i managed wid this one and i have embraced it. Thanks to Rachana for few toppings.

Coming to deeper thinking, yea, i do dwell bit deeper but i think it is quite relative. I do stick to the contradiction as someone said
"I think and therefore i exist"
and
"I exist and therefore i think".

I am not sure still...

Thanks again for interpreting the pics. You are the first person to do so and it did communicate along the track.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Hary,
Thanks buddy..... I always cherish your visits and warm feedback..

@ Mehak...
Thanks:)

@ Roshmi,
Yea, it all started with the last word in my mind.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Rachana...

Wow, finally someone got the hidden shades and shadows of this post.

You are almost true, just behind few steps. Lemmi spill the beans. i have clubbed 3 different version into one generic one.
The she here indicates 3 things here.
1. She
2. Taj Mahal
3. Mumtaz

Now, the camera(photo), SHE and the HE
1. She : Any girl who is being restricted by the paternal society(He) though there are rational things in the same religion(Photo)

2. Taj Mahal : The Taj Mahal deserves beauty. In my view it is a beautiful burqa in which the more beautiful Mumtaj is being masked by ShahJahan(He) by the help of camera called 'Architecture'. World knows more about Taj Mahal than the reason for the Taj, ie Mumtaj.

3. Mumtaj : She was being masked by her own beauty . Very few people know about the beautiful person in her. Here the HE is everyone of us and the camera is our mindset.

Thanks again for enabling me to reveal my intentions and leaving me with a writer's satiation.

Rachana Shakyawar said...

@ Mahesh

I loved the explaination..!
Interestingly...actually...i was somewhere thinking the SAME way like you did explain..But then when i was thinking to write my interpretaion in teh commnet box... I thought i might just spoil the slient silent beauty of your fiction with so many interlinks!

BUt now that You have actually spill the BEANS...I beleive the IT to be of coffee ...perhaps very aromatic and enchanting fiction...with so many amalmagation....yo yeah...love the feeling that I could catch your creative wings! Have ever a butterfly ever sat on your hand...it is same feeeling..hehehe..nothing like butterflies in stomach...LOL..wht a fool I'm indeed catching HUMMINGbutterflies...!


~Keep the Spark Alive..

Nethra said...

That was hilarious. :)

sushobhan roy said...

hey nice one.. enjoyed reading it... :)
wonderful narration buddy