Tuesday, April 27, 2010

Malice - 77 Fiction

Note:- 77 Fiction infers to fictional writings bounded to a maximum of 77 words.

Malice 

Ravi is one of the few boys who regularly attends the government school in the village for the sake of midday meals...

He is studying in third standard Telugu medium...
He works hard and topped in mid exams...

None of his classmates congratulated him...
No one plays with him ...
No one eats with him...

He is isolated in all the possible harsh ways for his uncommitted sin...
He is not an untouchable...
They just call him Bastard.


16 comments:

Shilpa said...

Donno what to say on this topic but yes the post is definitely thought provoking.

Nethra said...

That's reality. Can't be helped. :(

Gyanban said...

well written MK - but this post has the right mood for a longer version...so maybe you can give it a thought.

Mehak said...

what i like best about your fiction is that it always has a very realistic feel... as always, a thought-provoking post..

geeta said...

It is sad that the little child is punished for his uncommitted sin...But it is the reality and we cannot deny from that...
Your fictions have a realistic approach touching the corners of the evils of our society that should be taken care of...

Great post again...
Cheers

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Shilpa....
yes, it is one of the social malices where the real culprit hides safely behind the curtain of social norms...

@ Netra...
but i think we can change the way society treats such children.

@ Gyanban...i do agree with you. It do deserves a full version post but due to time constraints and exam requirements, am left with shorter versions. Even i do miss the full versions these days.
Will try to elaborate it once i am done wid my compulsions.
Thanks a lot for your rational and constructive feedback which makes me to dwell into better writings...
Yes, you are correct in saying so.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Mehak...
Thanks a lot for the pat buddy :)

@ Geeta...
but i think we can change the way society treats such children. We need radical changes in societal mindset to deal with such malice and discrimination.
Everything cannot be set straight through legal norms. We have to cope with certain consequences with committed social responsibility and matured thinking .
Thanks buddy :)

Roshmi Sinha said...

We have successfully pulled ourselves into a blackhole.

Wonder what would 'they' call the great sage Veda Vyasa, the Emperor Chandragupta Maurya...

Rachana Shakyawar said...

@ Mahesh

Extremely thought provoking fiction! Indeed not many think over such issues but your attempt is worth!

Yes! Such situations does occur in the society...but what is much worst is not those kids teasing that child...Kids hardly know such things..they say only what they listen and keep hearing from their elders!


Definitely it is the responsibility of the parents and people to teach kids not to treat anyone with less respect!

I blame those so called intellectual honourable People and not those bunch of 12years old children!

Perhaps I also Bow to the Mother of the Child.. who have this strenght to work hard and make her child study in a good school! Sure 110% respect for her and that child!

Excellent buddy...
do ~Keep the Spark ALive..

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ roshmi...
You are correct....the so called idealistic and Utopian ideas are being restricted to books and blogs and we do tend to be in blackholes...
Thanks for your points buddy :)

@ Rachana...
Thanks for the well responded feedback.... This is what exactly i was expecting from readers....... .
the role of parents and cumulative societal norms are to take the blame ... Kids are being programmed since childhood about certain treatments and priorities and hence infecting their thoughts at a very early stage in life.

And the so called elite section prefer arm chair criticism, popularity, awards and charisma than to make strides to being the change through proper actions...

Kudos to your apt response to all mothers who made it against all odds...

Thanks for the pat buddy :)

Bharathi said...

good one buddy. poignant.

Lakshmi Rajan said...

Hmmm reality bites... but first the kudos goes to the mother who sends the child to the school (and not make him a child labourer) second the spirit of the boy in trying times and topping the class... but then the real unfortunate thought is : who made the other small kids to venomously call him bastard? The society, the elders had created an open environment spitting venom against the mother-child that the venom has passed on to the other kids ...

Shilpa Garg said...

Ouch! That sure hurts!! Very poignant! Keep expressing!!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Bharathi...
Thanks :)

@ Lakshmi Rajan...
I do agree with every alphabet you said.... we need more responsible actions along with words of response...
Thanks a lot for the empathizing and appealing feedback :)

@ Shilpa Garg...
Thanks for the response and we need more actions to support the cause :)

Madhulika said...

This post touches my heart...N the pic makes me hv tears in my eyes...

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Madhulike....
I will remember this response as one of the best all time....
I could feel the satiation of a writer and a human being...
Thanks a lottttt :)