Saturday, May 1, 2010

Escape

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 10; the tenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

Note:- This post is a pseudo-77 Fiction

Escape

I was standing at the river bank with a female body at my feet...

You don’t need to study medicine to know how she had died...

She died when a metal rod  repeatedly hit her head so hard  that her brain popped out of  her skull...

I wasn’t anxious to call a doctor, as at the time one end of the rod was cracking her skull, the other end happened to be in my hands....
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Wait...... read the story again with the following roles  :

                          I            - Capitalist Corporate
               She         - Earth             
               Rod         - Consumerism
           Doctor     - Conscience
        River       - Evolution


 Now, rather than thinking, " Who is escaping here?", .....
It would be better to ask , " Who is allowing the Escape to happen?"
Escape happens every second........ to us, with us, by us and around us......  and hence impacting us ..... and finally to erase us!!!
We can Escape easily from the responsibility of Escape with the help of numbers and statistics, but we cannot escape from the Wisdom of Nature.

PS : Intelligence is not an end in itself, it is one of the means to reach the ends.

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53 comments:

Surbhi Jain said...

a short one indeed to show something as grave as environmental issues!! really nice one!!

Nethra said...

Environmental issues are more painful than the other corruptions and stuffs. We don't kill just our selves here but also mother earth. :(

- The Virgin Author! said...

Environmental issues have been there since the beginning of life on this planet. No matter, whatever you do it, no matter how much you try to solve them - No use! I feel sorry for Earth for being tortured by assholes like us. Sad. Very sad.

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PS: Visit http://bit.ly/shewasenough

The Fool said...

Really loved your message, man. Today I was reading Bangalore mayor's plan to further exploit failing ground water instead of recharging and rejuvenating lakes and water harvesting. By blood begins to boil. Sometimes when I see mankind's greed I begin to hope third world war comes and whole mankind gets wiped out.

Leo said...

short, yet hit the mark very well. an escape much needed i think for Earth...

Escape

Shilpa Garg said...

That's your trademark post!! A hard hitting and a thought provoking issue!!
All the very best for BAT-10! :)

geeta said...

We are the only reason of our own destruction....Yes you were right it is the biggest crime ...We have a hell lot of reasons to escape from our responsibilities but we don't find even one to fulfill them....
Hard hitting post buddy
All the best for BAT 10...

Rajkumar Palnati said...

wow great anna

dmanji said...

Short but very effective and powerful... nice one ....

Rachana Shakyawar said...

@ Mahesh

WOW...what an enchnting construction to the presentaion of your iconic thoughts!

Quite a hammer over our acts and behaviour of nature towards the earth!


Simply awesome..loved the definations and interconncetions with each individual word..quite a strong post with powerful churns of thoughts :)

~Keep the Spark ALive..

Roshmi Sinha said...

A short post... yet packs quite a punch.

Mindless consumerism and industrialization and so-called progess and development have been ruining this planet for decades now.

But... just you wait for the backlash from mother Nature...

Sureindran said...

Thanks for thinking about the earth which most of us tend to forget. A good read it was.

Sureindran R. - Escape

Gyanban said...

This is like a Tequila shot. nice. but wanted to read some more..
Cheers

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Surbhi Jain...
Thanks for the pat :)

@ Nethra...
Yep, am with every word of you :)

@ Virgin Author...
Well said and quite objective response....

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Fool,...
am glad that you loved the post and thanks a lot for the responsive feedback :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Leo...
Thanks for the pat buddy :)

@ Shilpa Garg...
Am in smiles as you stamped it as my trademark post......thanks a ton for the compliment...

@ Geeta...
Yea, you are right in saying so.... we are in absolute escape....
thanks for the pat buddy...

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Raj...

Namsthe rajugaaru.....
welcome to wisdomism sir....
thanks dude...
keep making ur presence....

@dmanji....
Thanks for the words buddy :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Rachana...
What made me to go into satiation is the way you have touched the crux of the post....
Thanks a ton for your response and the feedback with emphasis on my stamp...
and it sounds great to read the analysis with much objectivity...
thanks again buddy :)
Cant ask for more now....

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Roshmi...
Yes, you have said it correctly and i agree with you...Thanks for the appreciation ..

@ Sureindran...
Thanks buddy :)

@ Gyanban...
A compliment with nasha... Yea, more could have been written....even i thought to....but i posted the link too early this time....and a regret now :(

I have already decided to write a lengthy post to make you saturated

geeta said...

Hey buddy ,
Thanks a lot for such an overwhelming response on my post...Actually the credit is all yours...You inspired me to write the poetry this time otherwise I would have escaped from BAT 10....

Your encouraging words brought out my creativity...Thanks a lot...

sushobhan roy said...

hey thats awesome .. :) The way u brought out the environmental issue in light.. Loved reading it..

All the best for the batom...

I too write short stories and have just posted a 55 fiction on my blog for the blog-a-ton. My first attempt at 55 fiction.. Hope u will like it.. :)

Jayanta Deka said...

Touchy very touchy... A nice way to show that everyone tries to escape... when it comes to real issue.
Major issue are given a skip by almost all creature like us. We tend to like the fun part of it only.
Good one...
~ Keep the spark alive ~
Cheers LIFE
JD

Yemiledu said...

Hey nice one...
Well written and well expressed!

Saro said...

So that was a thought inciter. Very short, concise and to the point. Good good good!

Shahid said...

A great forum to spread the message...nice thought..Initially i thought it was a murder mystery!!..nice headfake...

Shahid

Chatterbox said...

Excellent post Mahesh :)
Loved your thought provoking direct hit on an important issue :D

Keep 'em coming!!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ sushoban Roy...
Thanks a lot for the pat buddy...
welcome to wisdomism :)
am glad that you loved it...
keep visiting :)

@ Jayanta deka...
thanks a bunch for the reponsive feedback...you are correct in saying so

@ Yemiledu...
Thanks buddy...welcome back :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Saro...
thanks a lotttt for the pat buddy..welcome to wisdomism :)
keep dropping by ..

@ Shahid...
Hey shahid....i still call it a murder mystery...i mean earth's murder...thanks for the pat buddy :)

@ Chatterbox...
Hey buddy....thanks for the appreciation and the encouragement .... keep visiting :)

tikulicious said...

Fantastic . I love crisp fiction. Will be reading some more of your work. thanks for visiting my blog and commenting. do drop by again. Best

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ tikulicious ...
Thanks for the appreciation and the response ...welcome to wisdomism...i will be looking forward towards your further visits. :)

Karan Shah said...

a very strong message indeed

swayambhu said...

Hey I liked this!! good 1

blabberblah said...

Interesting how you related to entirely different issues and brought them together to make a point. Environmental issues make up some of the most pressing problems in the world today and unless we begin to realise how serious the problem is, there's soon going to be very little left for us to lose.

You used a topic like 'Escape' to bring out a contemporary issue. Best of Luck for Blog a ton!

blabberblah said...

Interesting how you related to entirely different issues and brought them together to make a point. Environmental issues make up some of the most pressing problems in the world today and unless we begin to realise how serious the problem is, there's soon going to be very little left for us to lose.

You used a topic like 'Escape' to bring out a contemporary issue. Best of Luck for Blog a ton!

Vipul Grover said...

Interesting post Mahesh.. nd yeah good use of this platform to spread an important message. Keep them coming!

Siddhesh 'Ravan' Kabe said...

that was a hard hitting post...I appreciate your views on consumerism...:)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Karan shah...
Thanks buddy...Welcome to wisdomism :)

@ Swayambhu...
Thanks for the response buddy :)

@ Blabberblah...
Thanks a bunch buddy for the pat and the responsive feedback... Yea, we need actions backed thoughts :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Vipul...
Thanks a lotttt for providing me such constructive platform to share and express...I am looking forward for some actions in the next BAT...

@ Siddhesh...
Thanks a lot for the pat and the appreciation..
keep dropping by buddy :)

Nachiketa said...

short, to the point with a message...

great post.

cheers,
The Variable, Crazy Over Desserts - Nachiketa
Catch me on facebook @ Crazy Over Desserts

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Nachiketa...
Thanks buddy :)
Welcome to wisdomism...
keep dropping by :)

Amity said...

You have just served everyone something to think about on how to care for mother earth and be responsible creatures!

I did go over and over with the intro then back to your presentation of who is who!

Very nice work indeed...the substance and the message it wants to impart to all!

Goodluck for BATOM! This work should not escape all others in their decision to vote for you!

Psych Babbler said...

A very different take on the topic... nice one! =) Good luck!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Amity...
Thanks a bunch buddy for such responsive feedback and encouraging pat with insights into my conviction...am glad for it and humbled by your words.

i hope it wont escape from the reader's thoughts to turn their opinions into fruitful actions in their daily lives towards the cause ... thanks again :)
keep dropping by...

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Psych Babbler ...
Thanks buddy :)
wish you the luck :)

evanescentthoughts said...

Loved the way you related the whole thing to environmental issues. If we dont do something soon, human race will become past tense just like all other animals which are getting extinct.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ evanescentthoughts...
Thanks for the feedback and the pat buddy :)

Mural! said...

Like I said in twitter, this post is indeed well presented :) unlike what you feel and you can see the outright good response in the comments......I especially liked the endnote :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Murali...
Thanks for your analyzed response...yea, the last means more for me. thanks for recognizing it buddy. :)

Karthik said...

Isn't that 77 fiction a retake on Desmond Bagley's novel's (The Enemy) opening lines? I'm sure it is.
"I was standing at the edge of the cliff road with a body at my feet. You didn’t need to study medicine to know how the man died. He died of cardiac arrest. The arrest was caused due to a thin blade of steel passing through his heart. I wasn’t too anxious to call a doctor as at the time the blade pricked out his life its handle happened to be in my hands."

Either ways, the way you've interpreted it using it as a figure of speech is commendable.
All the best!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Karthik...
Yes, you are correct.
That is why i called it 'pseudo fiction' . It has got an universal appeal and i wanted to adapt it to the environmental issue....
Am glad that you have mentioned it...
Thanks a lot buddy :)

Richa Sharma said...

I am glad at least someone is getting out of the silly web of life's troubles and writing about more important issues like this.
Loved reading it.. powerful i must say!!

Kp Up!!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Richa Sharma...
I am glad that someone recognised one of the motives of wisdomism and this particular post was a very important one in my perspective...
Thanks a bunch for the analysis and the responsive pat :)

Mehak said...

interesting short piece...and a very different take on the topic. all the best!